Topic: Poem from me :)

[dutchgirlfan]

anytime darling...im just being honest

[Vikki]

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rite i have this one , i will state now this is NOT how i'm feeling this is jst things tht popped into my head in order to create this poem. it's another attempt lol.

Dashed Dreams

looking up into the sky
mind taken in by the pure white clouds
thinking deep into the blueness of the sky
drifting away from reality
imagining a better place
a dream come true
anything from where i am now
in a big black hole
darkness filling my mind
trying to find a way out
wanting to be myself again
not pretending to be something i'm not
seeing the sky turn grey
slowly coming back to reality
my dream is destroyed
no way out of the hole i'm in
do i give up?
do i keep trying?
will it be like this forever?
desperation overriding my thoughts
will this ever stop?

[dutchgirlfan]

good you dont feel like this cauz it sounds morbid! but you use good word describing words

[Vikki]

lol. thanx B . nope i can assure u i'm far from tht. lol. it's still rubbish lol.  i'm gonna post a really rubbish one now but o well i'm not a writter so, i dont expect to do good.
Posted on: October 15, 2008, 11:08:14 AMfrom ages ago which is why its rubbish lol. attempt 3 lol.

Living Life

Going places
Doing things
Travelling around
Experiencing different ways to live
Living life to the full
Living each day like no other
Each day different
Seeing different sights
Turning out the lights
Awakening to a new day
Having fun
Singing aloud
Filling the time of day
Historic sights
Or walk at nights
Sunbathing on a beach
Or taking pictures of history
Experiencing the rest of the world
Not being confined in one area
Living life differently
Independently
Going into a knew era.

Nightmares
Lieing there still
Mind takes over
Then it hits me
Horrible thoughts wizzing around
Not knowing what to do
How do i stop them?
Why me?
Haunting me
Leave me be
They are controlling my mind
Scared
Frightened
Worried
They are uncontrolable
There's nothing i can do
Is something bad going to happen?
Are these nightmares a sign?
My eyes unable to open
STOP!
Am i going crazy?
I can't take no more
I've had enough
Finally eyes open
Nightmares stop
Until the next time

[dutchgirlfan]

the first one i like more.....an advice is, make the sentences more floathing, that you can read a rhytm if you know what i mean.

[Vikki]

yep i get ya . thanx for advice B. they are from ages ago lol tht jst shows how rubbish i was then and, well i'm still rubbish but improved a tad bit from them.

[ericb]

Vikki,as you know,I've had trouble accessing this.But you know what? As frustrating as it was to get on,you're writing well well,well worth the time it took. You are very VERY gifted
and I hope you will continue to bless us with your wonderful work,as well as your wonderful presence.God bless you aways.

[Vikki]

haha thanx eric but i'm no writer lol which is why i dont write alot lol. what i've wrote most of it suxs but like the song and the Dashed dreams are okish the rest pfff dustbin is where they should be lol.

[Penguin Lover]

i like them vikki. they are not rubbish.

[Vikki]

thanx Kelcey. everyones opinions are different i guess and thts jst mine lol

[Jesse]

I really like Nightmares!

[Vikki]

omg r u serious?.
thanx jesse, glad u liked it.

[Jesse]

yes i am serious.

[Vikki]

thanx

[ericb]

Hiiii Vikki,please write some more for us.God bless.