Topic: Soundless Surface

[K0RAYMA]

HAZELLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!1 whats up haven't spoken to u in awhile...
anyways awesome poems u got... u got a seriously great talent girl!!!

[ericb]

Keep up the writing hazel.

[hazel681]

we had been young
you and I
you lie with your face on the floor
you were my almost
but nothing more
in the air was something more


I check every room
i search every door
the thing I found
was my eyes staring back
into themselves


I’m getting ready for it
Choosing my words with elaboration
I hate when you would smile at me and say
Were almost there
Almost there
you lie with your hands on the floor
To contain your echo would be
Like to fall into the sky

I tried to fall
Bit by bit you missed out
Its not the war that gets me fighting
Its when were done
Its when you leave
And walk with nothing more to say
But there was so much to say
we were almost more than love
than the way i looked at you
and didnt see only myself

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

Dear Hazel
Mind reading can bring answers.. or carry far to untied... issues... and so I was circling... tracking... memorising... connecting and wondering... and finally... I guess I was crushed on possbile not bad idea for title of your poem... Maybe used.. or asking for some adjective... but... lonelines... Few times marked and emphasised state of staying alone... How I remember those hard words lol?... Further research remind me how is with your style and what I should expect... so I am again lost in between knowing that it can be yours experience or learned... or even both connected... Still... you were away for quite long... Its enough high possibility that you came back with bag of experience... And here comes mission to find out... Lol... should I poke you for PM?... expect answers in coming arts?... or catch unable to catch Vikki?

[uniqueandalanis4]

  amasing amasing amasing!!!!!!!!! still ur #1 fan gurl!!! keep up the great talent god gifted u with!

always april ann*

[hazel681]

thank you rob! haha. i know its been a long long time. you can catch me in pm if you want
and thank you april, you are amazing too dear.

[uniqueandalanis4]

  Thank you hazel!!!!:)

[hazel681]

SHELTER

If I try
if I try to explain
Will you let me give in
Til the sun burns
Just Like a knife hurts
And its swarming around my head
It’s a new walk
Im a fall out
And the lines they are so thin
Can you tell me
Will you let me
Can you be my only one
who is my
Shelter
Living in a shelter

These emotions
they control me
With teeth they would like to tear
Apart from this
Its an empty list
The beating I hear it too
Hear the heartless drum

Its an old friend
The holes and caving in
Come and look at the faded black street
It’s a post-war
Street we live on
And I cant go outside without a cry

If I try
If I try
Will you let me
Can you see me
I would want it no other way
There’s a light on
In the circles
I walk on for miles with fear
Can you be my
only one who is my-
If you don’t I understand
It’s a lonely view from here
And I think I’m starting to fit in
Where is my
shelter
Living in your shelter

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

I could hesitate.. but I guess I cant run away from.. idea of trying to give good comment lol... Well... its like first time I feel so nervous about it... and its not lack of time confusing my mind... Its just... all those thoughts about wide story that are full picture of puzzle... And one piece is before me... *Shelter*... So its love story in major part... Hmmm... like many those lives in this world lol... It makes it so... powerfull and important since you shape words into masterpiece... and leave it for my head to crash on duh lol... Hmmm... Meaning of shelter (in your art) gives me.. errr... picture... or rather impression of hug that is deeper than just a hug... You know... giving hug more with feeling than doing it without reason or just for acting... Still... on the ending its like someone is more as hidding... and you wait to be let it... Yeah... it has to mean that you are searching for that person lol... Btw... Funny that base is a post war... or just allegory to... hmmm... maybe war for love... Your war... God knows who started lol... Out of commenting - Someone mentioned circles?.... Oooo... Cookies.. Where?... Duh... I want cookie... hmmm... Well... it would be good if you bake it yourself... Yeaaaaah... No stress... just a little bit getting dirty with flavor and your heart to make it good.. lol... Ghehehe... Putting spell on you... Lil post Christmass wandering star dust lol *wink wink* 
P.S. - Sorry for being chaotic... No time to explain... Cant steal more of your life time duh lol...

[uniqueandalanis4]

hey hazel.... I Love It! like all of ur poems... there very interesting to me.. like a long story ''but short ... right on... keep up the deepness.. always your #1 fan... >april ann.

[hazel681]

*NEW*


If magnetism could reveal it's secret
it would explain this feeling tonight
i know he's out there
feeling sorry for what he did
but i still can't help and smile
he's more genuine than anyone
than anyone is
i just want to hold him
if only for a moment
it's not who he's made to be
fell into a deeper state of mind
some cannot control
but how he feels and how i feel
its harmonious, it's like a song
if everything was easy
and he ran away to dare
he knows i would follow him
one day he'll take me there

[ericb]

That's great Hazel. It's good to see you back.

[hazel681]

thank you eric 

[ericb]

thank you eric 

I hope you're back to stay?

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

One more like this... and you will make official EMO from me ... Right now I am still hidden ... Ok... I will be honest ... Your art moves ... but I guess I have some deficiency ... to be EMO lol ... Anyway... I am not sure if I do right thing by double stop to my deduction over message ... I remember well that inside stories are easy to be related... Hmmm... I guess the strongest art essence is in its message... The feeling is strong, clear... and even overwhelming... Strong inspiration... Well... ummm... I will just add that its sweet and... I cant act again like this story is taken from life lol... but I guess its stronger lol... Anyway... The person aimed should give you more and more... Inspiration of course