Topic: Two new poems - "If I Could" and "I'm Right Beside You"

[I-am-@ddicted]

Enjoy. Positive critacism only please.  Thanks



If I could.



If I could I would teach you
To see life through new eyes
To watch the beauty that surrounds you
And to treasure what in front of you lies

If I could I would tell you
The stories of each person that we meet
Get lost in all their histories
That has led them to this street

If I could I would show you
How to love with all your heart
And how to truly appreciate
Life in all it's art

And If I could I would warn you
Never to let a day pass you by
Where you won't treasure it,
Instead make the memories of your life

___________________ ___________________ __

I'm right beside you.


In times when you're lonely
And your thoughts turn to me
Know that I'm right beside you.

In times when you're joyful
And you want to share them with me
Know that I'm right beside you

In times when you're troubled
And you want to confide in me
Know that I'm right beside you

In times when you're sick
And your calling for me
Know that I'm right beside you

And when God calls you home
And you want to share that long walk with me
Look because I'll be right beside you

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

I came around from different reason- I found it  ... Strange coincidences are twisting my directions  ... Funny that you want only positive criticism lol ... Its unfair ... But how to find anything to hook and complain about lol? I can only complain why I found it so late ... Hmmm... I value the most the care coming out from the message... Each one is a wisdom combined with propelling emotion ... "If I could" is like coming from errr material angel ... "I'm right beside you" is like coming from esoteric angel ... Same love in different situations ... and perfected presentation by your arts 

[ericb]

I like them both,but especially the second. whoever you dedicated that oo is very lucky to have you around,i can tell you're very loyal to this person,aren't you?

[ToFindWhereTheSadnessEnds]

Great job on both poems... I like them both but really love the second one... I feel that they are both so relateable to people which is a really good thing... great work and keep it up!