Topic: Poem I Wrote Called Always Be There

[KC619]

Always Be There

As I walk alone these halls I see your face in a winter of fog sitting on a swing waiting for me and you to fall you will always be my crush that leads me to your heart of dust wind blowing in your hair there is no reason to be scared for I am here to protect you of all that was here even though I think about you constanly night and day I will always be here for you cause you make my day seem so gray you make me feel so happy that all the pain fades away when  i am around you I get so nervous inside cause you are my crush thats why I always will like you no matter what nothing can tear us apart. Cause you are my crush and you will always be in my heart.


Tell me if you like it yall

[Vikki]

its really good i like it , well done, i think, the poem itself is very well written it portrays a good image for the readers with how you paint a picture of "sitting on swing" etc etc, its got good emotion throughout and it has a nice flow to it, i reckon if you like split it up a bit it could like flow that lil bit more smoothly, aside from that keep on writing pal, great job Rob.

[uniqueandalanis4]

  awww great job... shows how much u love that one person and no matter what '' ur always there....even though u cant show how u feel for that person>>... always gonna be in ur heart'' thoughts and dreams!!:) thanks for posting..

keep writting... poor ur heart out even if u have to make ur heart bleed''let it bleed'' get a cloth to hold back ur tear's and wipe away that shyness u are having...and go for what u want!:)

april*

[ericb]

Always Be There

As I walk alone these halls I see your face in a winter of fog sitting on a swing waiting for me and you to fall you will always be my crush that leads me to your heart of dust wind blowing in your hair there is no reason to be scared for I am here to protect you of all that was here even though I think about you constanly night and day I will always be here for you cause you make my day seem so gray you make me feel so happy that all the pain fades away when  i am around you I get so nervous inside cause you are my crush thats why I always will like you no matter what nothing can tear us apart. Cause you are my crush and you will always be in my heart.


Tell me if you like it yall

that is great. You put your heart into that,I can tell.keep writing. if you dedicated that to a particular person,i hope they see it.